Every photo of you is like a masterpiece of art! Priceless artwork… So beautiful Mss A! So breathtakingly complimentart with these articulately chosen words… the perfect blend pleasing to the eye and ear, heart and soul! ~J
Just a suggestion:
The first ‘up’ has force, and can’t really be replaced.
However, the other two line-endings with that word, one after the other, take some of that force away, and distract?
I like the short abrupt sentences and the gist appeals! I agree that maybe a few less ups would make it even better, but what the hell, it’s a bloody good poem.
Eyes focused straight ahead
A destination in mind
Yes
Haters pull down, I liked the way you made that all work. Nicely done.
I really love your words. Thanks for sharing.
Don’t reach the end… your journey is not over
Every photo of you is like a masterpiece of art! Priceless artwork… So beautiful Mss A! So breathtakingly complimentart with these articulately chosen words… the perfect blend pleasing to the eye and ear, heart and soul! ~J
Oh, and like your new background.
Just a suggestion:
The first ‘up’ has force, and can’t really be replaced.
However, the other two line-endings with that word, one after the other, take some of that force away, and distract?
I think u are right!!! I love this kind of feedback.
I like the short abrupt sentences and the gist appeals! I agree that maybe a few less ups would make it even better, but what the hell, it’s a bloody good poem.